there's this ocean of marine to explore
in looking up.
Above the sky is glazed with little hues of blue
a puff of white sprays smoke
as eyes reach out and up above spindly arms of trees
past nervous noise and into the great expansive world
of sky.
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Saturday, February 10, 2007
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It's strange but I keep forgetting about checking our main page now. Sorry I didn't see this sooner, Tiger. Neat picture and just a touch creepy somehow. I'm afraid of spiders, dunno if that has the slightest thing to do with my impression but maybe. :)
I liked the idea of an ocean overhead but I don't think it quite works to say ocean of marine. I'm not quite sure what would be better...also, I am wondering what the nervous noises are, birds maybe? Or something else. Dunno. Thanks.
Hey Tiger,
Thanks for continuing to post your photographs. Definitely another one of your talents!
I love the idea of comparing the sky to an ocean. I'm not sure if marine fits exactly either. It sounds nice, though. :)
I like "a puff of white sprays smoke." And I like the "spindly arms of trees." I would like to know a little more about "nervous noise" as well.
This is a strong overall image and I think just added to it a bit would make the overall effect even stronger.
Thanks!
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